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    They came-
    All at once, straight ahead

    Valiant self started to deplete~
    Looked at my fellow comrades,
    Dauntless and intrepid look buried their distress and anxiety filled eyes.
    Yet- repentance never impeded its way.

    Anticipation to procure the war,
    was alone a mindless thought?
    Battleground thronging with gunshots~
    Smokes and ashes everywhere I turn to fight,
    Unveiled my face with conviction to nothing but a mere soul.

    “Among thy fears did I feel,
    Nor, misery! did I know till then,
    Petrified to elude from me
    What love I bore to thee”
    And she, I cherish linger’d upon herself.
    Her letters’ comfort concealed me within firm spirit;
    For there I needed it, when I set my sail off to war.

    ‘Tis blood covered o’er the path,
    Bodies of comrades laid down,
    Some crying upon torment and pain,
    Some simply left with a bland body.
    Voices of their sorrowful weep filled up the air,
    With clouds darkening and crows howering;
    whilst the battle continued at its peak.

    Amidst the image of fatal and killing,
    want’d this battle to end;
    ‘Tis with a loud thud that ceased.
    Tried to keep my hope up,
    while her picture float’d away into the light.
    and as I opened my arms to the fragile colours.

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    Susan Katz
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    Thank you for submitting your poem to be considered for Featured Poem of the Month, for June.  You have some lovely lines in your poem.  I particularly liked “some simply left with a bland body” and “I opened my arms to the fragile colours.”  Thank you for sharing this intensely felt poem with me, Susan

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