Home Forums Poetry Talk Martand

Viewing 4 posts - 1 through 4 (of 4 total)
  • Author
    Posts
  • #17791
    Martand
    Participant
    SHE 

    She’s a mermaid of an ocean, eyes mirroring pearls
    She’s the Aphrodite ohh god, as she smiles magic swirls
    She’s a band of gleaming stars, sweeping all the gloom,
    She’s a rose ousting beauty, I watch her as she blooms.

    She’s a breeze of monsoon night, whispering in my ears
    She’s a river of elixir, douses thirst with her tears.
    She’s a never ending joy, I adore her as we meet,
    She’s a wine of utmost richness, I enjoy her as a treat.

    She’s a belle of the sky, giving complex to the moon
    She’s a nightingale of a shore, I dance as she tunes.
    She’s a blend of sparkling eyes, with long silky hair,
    She’s an art of the God, to be handled with some care.

    She’s a realm of spirituality, a glorious blue-eyed saint
    She’s a sweet melodious song, as I listen, I get faint.
    She’s an eternal beauty, as she smiles she kills many,
    She’s a voice of my soul, a tranquilizing epiphany.

    She’s like the autumn, as she sheds maple leaves.
    She’s the Cinderella, whose shoe I wish to keep.
    She’s the most divine, an elegant celestial queen
    She’s the one who has, made me cheerful and serene.

    #18404
    Susan Katz
    Keymaster

    Thank you so much for sharing this lovely poem with me.  There is so much love and joy in your poem and you have some very beautiful images as well.  I would like to suggest that you don’t work so hard on rhyming, your poetry would stand out even more if you concentrated on your beautiful and meaningful images.  I am happy to consider your poem for Featured Poem of the Month for June.  Keep writing – you have talent, Susan

    #18405
    Martand
    Participant

    Thank you so much and i will consider your suggestion. Really grateful!

    #18426
    Susan Katz
    Keymaster

    You are most welcome!

Viewing 4 posts - 1 through 4 (of 4 total)
  • You must be logged in to reply to this topic.