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    Muskan Antil
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    whenever i felt your presence around me, i always try to find you vibes, Though i wish you could be able touch my crying soul through your soothing hands , leave those pride which holding you tight, just feel those vibes which i always try to send you every time , now my heart and soul both are scared to fall asleep , i know they will burst out in your memories for real , shirking and ask for reasons to change the past , but they are innocent how they can know how other’s soul leave attachments so easily and you both were just used by that mind to pass their time. 

     
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    Susan Katz
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    Thank you so much for sharing your very heartfelt poem with me.  I can feel the emotion you are trying to express.  I wonder if you would be interested in editing your poem – shortening it and using more in the way of images.  It is too long for me to feature in my current submission request but, perhaps, if you were to tighten it and create more in the way of “visual” images, I might be able to use it in the coming weeks.  Again, I am so happy to have had a chance to read your poem.  Your friend in poetry, Susan

    #18501
    Muskan Antil
    Participant

    Hi, thanks for your feedback. I have updated my poem, but dont know how to make it in a visual form, i would be happy if you ll share your feedback regarding this updated poem.

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