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  • July 9, 2021 at 3:36 pm #17896
    Aya_pieceofme
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    Apart across the frozen lake

    past the fallen leaves

    Following the drops and falls

    water on its breeze

    Burn and turn as it

    Drips and dries

    Past the bright and essenced

    Rhymes

    Until

    Enough is enough

    For all to be.

     

    July 9, 2021 at 4:03 pm #18527
    Susan Katz
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    Thank you so much for this very well written and very intriguing poem.  I like the rhythm, the way the poem moves from line to line, taking us along on, what turns out to be, a slightly unexpected destination.  I like your “slant rhymes” and the energy of your images.  I will be featuring your poem, in the next two weeks, on my poetladykatz Instagram page.  I thank you so much for your interest in poetladykatz and for sharing your poem with me.  Write on!  – Susan

    July 10, 2021 at 2:46 am #18529
    Aya_pieceofme
    Participant

    It is always a pleasure to hear when my words become images in another person's eyes. Thank you so very much for your feedback.
    Cheers Ash

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