This is a very interesting poem with some lovely moments. I am, however, a bit confused by the language. “Healing the heart by friend’s tides – Beneath the Earth wonders will unfold” – not sure what this means – also the last lines could be clearer, as well. I do think it is a translation issue. I do think you are saying that if we grow love and friendship we will magnify the “good” of the world, but it is very hard to hear that the way the words come together. I love the concept, the rhythm, the tone – I think it just needs a bit of editing to make sure you have the right words in the right order, to say what it is you are hoping to say. Thank you so much for sharing your work with me. You friend in poetry, Susan
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