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    Moumita Sinha
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    If I could write about you,
    With the same force that drives my thoughts,
    Ruthlessly, relentlessly
    Devouring my existence in the blink of an eye,
    I’d stay up all those nights I wasted dreaming of you
    And torture myself into agony
    Till you’re begging to be released from the prison of my mind
    Out in the form of beautiful words.
    I’d learn your movements, and the thunder of your footfall
    Your heavy breathing at my shoulder, urging me on and on
    I’d write till my wits collapse
    I’ll write till I’m chock-full of sea water and cigarette smoke in my lungs.

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    Susan Katz
    Keymaster

    There are some very strong images in your poem.  I particularly liked “Till your begging to be released from the prison of my mind/out in the form of beautiful words.”  I also very much like “the thunder of your footfall.”  I’m a little less sure of “chock-full” as it somehow seems out of place.  Well conceived, well written, emotionally charged poem!  Thank you so much for sharing with me.  I will definitely consider your poem to be featured in a future poetladykatz Instagram post.  Your friend in poetry, Susan

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