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    Yukta Hindurao Rane
    Participant

    Knock knock, myself alcohol!
    Oh, are you scared of me?
    Please don’t be, I am not bad,
    It’s just sad that people misuse me.

    Do you want to know me more?
    Oh, come on, atleast you can explore.
    You can call me ethanol, it’s my pet name.
    Ah, now you will recognize my strong points, why I am fame!

    I am friends with those organic compounds,
    Who doesn’t like water, so they like to be friends with me,
    That’s why I am used in perfumes, cosmetics and markers.
    Limited prescribed consumption of me helps you keep away from doctors.😊

    But it’s very sad to see,
    When my fellow beings consume me to forget their pain,
    I am not the solution, I try to speak,
    But no one listens to me, some sell me for their gain .
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    I am not the ultimate solution to the problem,
    I just make you forget the problem.
    Truth , joy , pain, heartbreak will make you stronger,
    Get away from me, celebrate every emotions within 

    Insta handle: @little_magic_of_words

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    Susan Katz
    Keymaster

    Thank you so much for sharing your poem with me.  What a very important message you are speaking in your poem.  I know it will resonate with people.  From a poetic point of view, I would have liked to have seen more imagery (metaphor and simile) and less rhyme.  This is more of a well written talk on the hazards of alcohol and it needs to reach people on a more intense level – speaking with the voice of the poet, not the narrator.  I think you can do it – you have a great deal of potential and some fine language choices.  I would suggest you spend some time reading poetry – that’s what I always do when I think I am having a problem with my writing.  Contemporary poets would be a good choice.  (Derek Wolcott – Miller Williams – Sylvia Plath – Louise Gluck – Mary Oliver and many, many more.) Your friend in poetry, Susan

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