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    Nandini Jha
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    Enthralling beauty of the waves kept my eyes mesmerized
    Smell of roses was enough to make me realise it still wasn’t heaven
    The dead pieces of shells pricked me
    The noisy beach seamed noiseless
    Lost in my own thoughts
    It wasn’t the right time I realised someone was at their top notch of voice
    It was a line to address 15

    Address 15 nothing much special
    But a bunch of memories
    Diaries full of talks
    Nights spent under the sky
    Moments that turned into memories
    But still make me feel everything again

    Collecting my bits and pieces it was the time to move ahead
    To address 15
    Wasn’t easy to leave back the beauty of waves
    It was my final good bye to waves
    It was my last visit to address 15
    Collecting my cherished moments
    I decided not to be back again

    Parting away from a person is easy
    But their memories still make us a different person
    Heading to address 15 wasn’t as easy as I thought
    Those flowers still bloomed
    Lilies gazing like they used to
    Smiling toddlers could make me smile too
    The chit chats that never ended on the way
    Chocolate ice cream still is a best seller

    And finally to address 15
    Still with our names engraved
    Still with a stupid painting hanging at the entrance

    Still echoed with our smiles
    Our voices still reverbed in the room
    But then it was no more a thing to be happy about

    I walked away from the doorstep without any noise
    It was my terminal goodbye to the lilies I cherised
    Gardens that made me happy
    The vines that created a charismatic aura
    And a pleasing sunset that could make your day
    This is how address 15 though not that special but invaluable
    A bouquet of priceless memories 

    Not a poem but emotions penned down .. 

     

     

     

     

     

     

    #18667
    Susan Katz
    Keymaster

    Thank you so much for this very heartfelt poem (or musings) – it captures such a nostalgic mood, a sense of something lost or left behind – something, I think all of us can relate to.  If you were to want to work on this and turn it into a poem, it would need some editing, some thought as to how to express some of these emotions through imagery, metaphor and simile, but you certainly do have some fine work here and it could become, I believe, a fine poem.

    Thank you so much for sharing with me.  Your friend in creative writing of all kinds, Susan

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