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    m_uzair_ans
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    I lit a candle in the unending void,

    It’s glow searing the cold darkness;

    Eyes wide, lips curled into a smile,

    After long had I been this overjoyed.

     

    Came a squall of wind and sand,

    And the flame began to falter;

    Worry creeping upon my face,

    I shielded the blaze with my hand.

     

    Rumbled and roared the mighty gust,

    I tried my best to shelter the light;

    But destiny sought something loathsome,

    As the flame died of fate unjust.

     

    Fear of the imminent growing larger,

    I foolishly hoped for the impossible;

    The darkness did return inevitably,

    Only this time it appeared darker.

    (Ig: @m_uzair_ans)

    #18700
    Susan Katz
    Keymaster

    Thank you so much for submitting your poem for consideration for Featured Poem of the Month for December.  I very much like the way the mood builds in your poem and how you create a sense of “darkness” that takes us on a dramatic journey.  I also think you did a great job with your ending stanza – the “slant” rhyme at the end, works really well.  Good job.

    Your friend in poetry,

    Susan

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