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    Tiny glowing star
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    The Ballet of butterflies!

    Such large mesmerizing wings,
    With enchanting swings,
    There are no dukedom of kings,
    To wake them in flings!
    Such carefree movements,
    I wonder if they are in some sort of dance?
    To make the world take a glance,
    At their flapping dashing waltz!
    Two antennas like ears,
    Looking forward to the skies,
    Like an ballerina who is flawless,
    Luring out audience at small steps of glides!
    A ballerina fly that is too restless,
    Ends up taking a break away from the stage,
    After a few minutes,
    She turns up her own page,
    By going on to the next nature stage,
    Leaving behind her soul with previous tree mage,
    She loves her ballet without hesitation,
    Hoping on to the next stage,
    To lure out souls with her fluttering ballet,
    Which is a performance with absolute warrent!
    – swetha.

     

    #18736
    Susan Katz
    Keymaster

    Thank you so much for sending your poem honoring the beauty, grace, and magical qualities of butterflies.  I too, watching them glide from flower to flower in spring and summer, am captivated by their unique elegance.  I would suggest that your poem would benefit from less rhyme.  Your thoughts are lovely and would flow more gracefully, without the effort of trying to rhyme every line.  I do very much appreciate your interest in http://www.poetladykatz and look forward to seeing more of your work in the future.  – Susan

    #18737
    Tiny glowing star
    Participant

    I will be sure to keep that in mind while writing my next poem!

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