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    Tiny glowing star
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    He who was born with silver spoon!

    He who was born with a silver spoon,
    In his mouth,
    Didn’t know the refreshing room,
    Of crystalline discerning heart in South!
    His foul plays over significant desires,
    Made him to brood unlikely in regret,
    He who was not born as a survivor,
    Didn’t know the fragrance of ordinary dessert,
    Emotionaly he turned into a missile,
    Strolling in terrible prejudice!
    He who was only a devouring man,
    Laughed in the face of worthful reality,
    But when perils swallowed him,
    He reluctantly became the prey to worthless fear!
    He who was born with a silver spoon,
    In his mouth,
    Didn’t know the truth of harsh reality,
    Literally became the witness to his own befall!

    Swetha.

     

     

    #18738
    Susan Katz
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    Thanks so much for sharing your poem with me.  There are some very strong moments and the poem carries a singular tone throughout, which I like very much.  I believe your poem would benefit from some thought to correcting grammar and tenses but, overall, I think you have written a fine poem, filled with emotion and truth.  Speaking your truth, is what poetry is all about.  Your friend in Poetry, Susan

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