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    Riya Jaiswal
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    My grandma always sang me to sleep

     

        “there lived an angel in the cerulean sky

         wove sapphire yarns embroidered with

         lilac, pink and crimson fleece

         people called it sunset

     

         sometimes she blotted them grey

         her tears kissed the earth

         leaving behind her scent and bow

         people called it rain

     

         every dawn, birds twittered her a visit 

         rooster hailed cock-a-doodle-doo

         so merrily she embroidered them golden

         breathed tender breeze swaying trees

         people called it sunrise”

     

    one night my grandma sang herself to sleep

    her woven neverland forever lost

    until I became a grandma and sang

     

           “there lived an angel in the cerulean sky

           embroidered with silver and multitudes 

           of orbs tucked in constellations

           people called it night sky…”

     

     

    #18821
    Susan Katz
    Keymaster

    I really like this poem.  I like the message.  I like the way you “spin” your story through a series of beautifully crafted images: “…

    sometimes she blotted them grey

    her tears kissed the earth

    leaving behind her scent and bow

    people called it rain…”

    Each of your images works and creates a beautiful “picture” for us, a lovely reality that we can connect with (sunset, rain, sunrise, night sky) – well done.  I would like to feature this poem in my “Poem of the Week” section, in about three weeks.  Let me know if that would work for you.  I have been working on a poem and newsletter that deals with “The People I Love” – and I think this poem would fit beautifully into that theme.

    Thank you so much for sharing this lovely poem with me,

    Susan

     

     

     

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