Good Morning Fahad Khalique and thank you so very much for sharing your poem with me. I love your sentiment – I love how you “speak” to poetry and how you revive the old masters and their voices.
I might suggest bringing the poem into the present tense – using “can” instead of “could.” That makes it seem immediate and we picture you with pen in hand or at your computer, trying to compose the poem – now, this very minute. I would also suggest that you go through the poem and if there is a place where a word is not necessary, remove it. Example:
Though I’m neither Keats nor Shelley
But I crave to go beyond them in imagination. ( I crave to pass them in imagination – or – I crave to go beyond their imaginations…)
In poetry, today at least, less is more. Again, thanks so much for sharing and do please keep on writing – find that imagination and let it flow onto the page. Your friend in poetry, Susan
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