Poetry Talk

I want to thank you for sharing your poem.  I believe you have some fine moments in the poem but, would suggest that you let the image (not the rhyme) take the reader where you want them to go.  For example:  “The stars came down/surrounding me in light/and I forgot my fear” is a more poetic way of saying what your poem intends.  It takes us to the place you want us to be, surrounded by light so bright, it makes us forget to be afraid.  If prose is an open hand, than poetry is a closed fist – tighter and more emotionally charged.  Keep on writing, I believe you have the passion for it.  – Susan