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July 3, 2021 at 3:29 pm
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Well done! I’m a slight bit confused by the lines “the more I feel, The more I starve!” I’m having difficulty connecting “feel” and “starve” but, “I drank the darkness with the stars… My bones are all that’s left with me” is strong and well written. I wonder if the word is “of me” rather than “with me” but perhaps you have a meaningful reason for your choice of words. I will definitely consider your work for featuring in one of my Instagram posts over the next two weeks. Thank you so much for sharing, Susan

