Poetry Talk

Thank you for submitting this very intense poem.  Such strong feelings come through and you have maintained the mood all throughout the poem.  I do believe your poem would benefit from imagery.  Words like “important” could be transformed into an image that would help the reader become more involved in the poem and the emotions.  “Important” as what?  You feel like a “God” or  “storm clouds” that block the sun.  You have an abundance of feeling in your poem, now give us some beautiful word pictures so we can experience your words on a sensory level.  Really enjoyed reading your poem and thank you again, for sharing.  – Susan