Poetry Talk

Thank you so much for sharing your very light and lovely poem with me.  You have some strong moments in your poem however, there are some real issues with translation into English.  For example: You do not need the word “that” in your lines – the line works more accurately and more grammatically, without “that.”  Also, I think the word you are looking for is “selfless” not “selfishless.”  Just a couple of possible edits.  Your poem reflects a true understanding of the mission of poetry.  And I am delighted to have had a chance to read it.  Your friend in poetry, Susan