Poetry Talk

Thank you so much for sending this very emotional and intense poem for me to read.  I can feel your passion and your commitment to the ideas you are sharing with your reader.  In order for it be more “poetic” I would love to see more imagery, sharper line breaks, and other poetic devices that help to bring the reader into the experience you are sharing with us.  May I respectfully suggest, you take a look at some of the lessons here at http://www.poetladykatz – as they may be helpful in editing your poem, if that is the path you choose.  Poetry is the perfect way to articulate your passions, and you certainly have done that.  Your friend in poetry, Susan