Poetry Talk

What a lovely tribute to someone who, obviously, means the world to you.  You have certainly captured a mood, a feeling, and let us in to your heart, with your words.  There are, I’m afraid, a multitude of grammatical errors, as this poem tries to translate itself into English.  Instead of saying, “When you are not in my life i am smile but …….. ”  in English it should read, “When you are not in my life I smile (take out the am.)  This is an amazing effort in a language that is obviously not the language you spoke from birth.  I truly thank you for sharing it with me and hope you spend some time rethinking and rewriting it, as you explore the grammar that will elevate your poem.  Your friend in poetry, Susan