Poetry Talk

Good job!  You have some very meaningful and powerful moments in your poem and you take us on the journey of the poet – from pain to purpose – to poetry.  I’m happy to consider your poem for Featured Poem of the Month for December.

I think you have done a fine job with this poem and would only suggest that you consider moments in the poem, that would benefit from imagery.  Example: “And makes tears flow from our eyes…”  Question – do you need “and makes” could not the line start with – “tears flow from our eyes (and here is where a great image could go) “tears flow from our eyes like…”

Also, I wonder, as poems are described as “the fewest words in the best possible order” – if you might not want to consider moving through your poem by taking out the repetition of “I found…”  “But I found a wand/ a pen/ spells/ a page/ a remedy/ for our souls…”

Well done – thank you so much for sharing your work with me, Susan