Poetry Talk

I am truly sorry for the delay in responding to you, but I have been dealing with a family emergency.

Your poem has a lovely, quiet message that takes us on a journey to the sea.  You have some delightful images, as well.  However, I would suggest that you not lean so heavily on rhyming.  Your rhymes (some of them very good) do tend to “take over” the poem and we cannot concentrate on the beauty of the scene and the feelings of making you feel like “a sea queen.”  I want more of that – words that paint pictures, rhythm and emotion.  Rhyme has its place but should not control the mood and message of the poem.  Thank you so much for sharing your meaningful poem with me.  Your friend in poetry, Susan