Poetry Talk

Good Morning Fahad Khalique and thank you so very much for sharing your poem with me.  I love your sentiment – I love how you “speak” to poetry and how you revive the old masters and their voices.

I might suggest bringing the poem into the present tense – using “can” instead of “could.”  That makes it seem immediate and we picture you with pen in hand or at your computer, trying to compose the poem – now, this very minute.  I would also suggest that you go through the poem and if there is a place where a word is not necessary, remove it.  Example:

Though I’m neither Keats nor Shelley
But I crave to go beyond them in imagination. ( I crave to pass them in imagination – or – I crave to go beyond their imaginations…)

In poetry, today at least, less is more.  Again, thanks so much for sharing and do please keep on writing – find that imagination and let it flow onto the page.  Your friend in poetry, Susan