Reply To: Pretty Little lies

[Susan Katz]

What a very emotional poem.  It is so personal and painful, it is almost hard to read.  I wonder, from a poetic point of view, if you could find a way to say all of this in fewer lines, using imagery.  I believe you have a poem here, one that needs to be written, it just needs some poetic techniques applied – imagery (metaphor and simile) rhythm, alliteration, rhyme if you so desire – and a tightening of the lines so that they become a fist, not an open hand.  Thank you so much for sharing,  I was genuinely touched and moved by your words.  – Susan