Reply To: 404: HUMANITY NOT FOUND

[Susan Katz]

You certainly managed to get a lot of information and emotion into your poem and I thank you very much for sharing it with me.  It is too long for me to consider for featuring on my Instagram page, for this week’s poetry submission feature.  I would, as I have said to many others, suggest you back off a bit on the rhyme and try to incorporate more in the way of imagery (metaphor and simile.)  Poetry should make us see, hear, taste, touch, and smell and then, react emotionally.  You have all the ingredients for a very fine poem, you just need to do the hard job, all poets must do, of editing.  Thank you again for sharing your work with me, Susan