Reply To: Iam the lamp of my way

[Susan Katz]

Very impressive poem.  I like your opening lines – they flow beautifully and set the stage for the rest of your message.  A few suggestions:  “can not” instead of “can’t” – “smooth” instead of “smoothen” which does not exist in English – and separate “I” and “am” – and finally, I don’t know if you need the last part of your ending line “of my dark pathway” as ” “For I am the lamp” says it all.  Well done.  Your friend in poetry, Susan