Reply To: My Destiny

[Susan Katz]

Hi Candice,  So nice to hear from you in the format of your very strong and meaningful poem.  I do have a number of suggestions – and they have to do with the concept in poetry that, less is more.  In other words, if you can say something in two words, don’t use five.  A few examples – “Dreams within me/ hoping they come true”  “The reasons for my bliss/ the secret of all this…”  Just a few examples of how you could tighten your poem and by doing so, strengthen it – make it more powerful.  Prose is an open hand, poetry is a closed fist.  Thank you so much for sharing – please send again, when you have had a chance to work a bit on it.  I do so appreciate your interest in Poet Lady Katz.  You friend in poetry, Susan