Reply To: Soul of infinite burdens

[Susan Katz]

Thank you so much for sharing your poem with me.  It is filled with honest emotion and humanity.  I would suggest, for the sake of the poem, that you try to find places where you could, perhaps, use an image instead of telling us.  Let me give you an example:

“society is rusted and disgraced” – “let tears flood your eyes like summer rain…”  A poem becomes accessible when we can see, hear, taste, feel, and even smell the feelings you are writing about.  You have a strong poem – I think you could make it even stronger.  I will, of course, consider your poem for Featured Poem of the Month for December.

Your friend in poetry, Susan