Reply To: Harvesting Happiness

[Susan Katz]

I notice this is the second poem you’ve submitted and I noticed something else, as well – you have a recognizable voice.  There is a cadence to your poems, the way you arrange the words, that is consistent and resonates with the reader.

Again, as with your other submitted poem, this poem would benefit from some word “cutting.”  Example:  Words like “yet” “and” – “When have you last soared/ seen the sun rise/ dreamed of sunflower fields…”

I very much like your work – I find it meaningful and purposeful and relatable.  I think this poem needs only the poet’s scalpel – a bit of trimming – a bit of editing, here and there, maybe a change of tense in one spot or another, to make it something really very special.

Thank you for submitting your poem for consideration for Featured Poem of the Month for December.  Your friend in poetry, Susan