Reply To: Anew, yet in doom!

[Susan Katz]

Thank you for sending.  There are some beautiful moments in your poem.  You have used alliteration – almost to perfection, in some instances.  “In the camouflage of dazzle, from camellia to camomile;”  “Pious patina of life’s passion, / In shades of worries & wonders;”

I am truly impressed with the way you articulate your way through the poem – English I presume, is a second language – and yet, you manage to use it very well to express yourself through the art of poetry.  There are some moments when I stumble over the wording but, having said that, your poem is really very, very good.  I will definitely consider it for the week of March 4th when my theme (and now you know before anyone else) will be “The Moods of March.”  I am very impressed with your poetic skills. 

May I suggest you go through your poem and look for moments when the poem could be edited a bit – taking out a word here or there and, checking the grammatical implications of words and word combinations.  A poem is always a work in progress.

Thank you so much for sharing, Susan