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Susan Katz
Keymaster

Thank you, for once again, sending a heartfelt and self-reflective poem.  I can tell you write from the heart.  Again, there are a number of grammatical/word-usage errors in the poem, that detract from the flow, rhythm, and meaning.  Here are a couple of examples:

People are sure on strolls,   (This does not translate well – people are “sure” on strolls – simply it could be – People stroll…)

To pass on the critical judgement, (passing on critical judgement…)

I won’t let people to judge me, (I won’t let people judge me – the “to” does not belong here)

Alas! It’s not a story about you judge,  (Alas, it’s not a story “for” you to judge…)

These are just a few examples and your poem would benefit greatly from checking on tenses and proper usage of words.  I would, however, reinforce the idea that you are passionate, purposeful, and powerful in your pursuance of poetry.  Do keep writing and sharing – I am delighted when I see one of your poems show up in my Chat Room.  Have a happy day, Susan