Reply To: Pain of losing someone.

[Susan Katz]

Thank you for sharing this extremely emotional poem with me.  One can feel the love and the loss and, therefore, is drawn into your joy and sorrow.  There are some grammatical errors, and, in some cases, the tense is wrong – for example: “these enchanting memory” “memory should be memories as “these” implies more than one.  I’m also wondering if when you use the word “ascend” you might have meant “descend” – ascend to go up – descend to come down.  You might want to go through the poem and check the tenses, grammar and, see if here or there a word might be removed or replaced.  All in all, a very fine effort and a very moving poem.  Thank you so much for sharing with me, Susan