Reply To: Introducing myself….

[Susan Katz]

Thank you for sharing.  This is a delightful poem!  I like the journey you take us on and I loved your ending.  If I were to suggest anything, it would be to try to tighten and smooth our your rhymes.  While poetry, of course, need not rhyme, I understand your desire to tell your story in rhyme – it adds a kind of “poetic” emphasis.  The one place I think needs a little editing is:

to save her from another child

she knew this one was very wild!  (this line is a little off in “rhythm” – perhaps something like “fearing this one would be wild!”)  Just a suggestion.

Thank you so much for being a part of https://www.poetladykatz.com – and I look forward to seeing more of your work.  Your friend in poetry, Susan