Reply To: Shadow, Light, and Life.

[Susan Katz]

Thank you so much for sharing your poem with me.  You have some very fine lines in this poem – I particularly liked – “Darkness takes leave & Shadow can’t see…”  You have a great deal of emotion (and faith) in this poem, which comes through to the reader.  I would suggest you check your grammar as some moments in the poem don’t seem to translate well into English and some words may not mean what you want them to – example: “Passing his paint of hollow.”  I don’t honestly know what that means or what the image might be.

I would also suggest that you reread your poem out loud – and if there are moments when you stumble, so will the reader.  In poetry, less is more, so, if a word or words are not needed or, are repetitive, you might consider removing them and rewriting the lines(s).

There are truly, some very fine moments in this poem and there is no doubt that the feelings and emotions you are feeling, are gifted to the reader.  Perhaps you would consider sending the poem again after you’ve had a chance to do some editing.

Again, my thanks for sharing with me and, may I wish you a very Happy, Healthy, Creative New Year, Susan