New reply from Susan Katz
<p>Thanks so much for sharing this very heartfelt poem with me. I wonder if "build a shield" is not "be a shield…" You definitely engage the reader and transmit your feelings – which, of course, is what poetry is all about. My only other suggestion would be to go through the poem and see if there are words that could be removed. In poetry, less is more…</p>
<p>Your friend in poetry, Susan</p>
https://poetladykatz.com/poetry-talk/maze
Original Post by Tiny glowing star
Maze
<p style="padding-left: 40px;">This soul</p>
<p style="padding-left: 40px;">This heart</p>
<p style="padding-left: 40px;">Always engaged in,</p>
<p style="padding-left: 40px;">Faraway troubles</p>
<p style="padding-left: 40px;">Of my loved ones…</p>
<p style="padding-left: 40px;">I cannot even build</p>
<p style="padding-left: 40px;">A shield for them,</p>
<p style="padding-left: 40px;">For I have always been a onlooker,</p>
<p style="padding-left: 40px;">Unable to even speak for myself….</p>
<p style="padding-left: 40px;">This soul</p>
<p style="padding-left: 40px;">This heart</p>
<p style="padding-left: 40px;">Has long stopped,</p>
<p style="padding-left: 40px;">Responding to this troubled</p>
<p style="padding-left: 40px;">World like maze…</p>
<p style="padding-left: 40px;">-Swetha</p>
<p style="padding-left: 40px;">@t<span style="font-size: 1.4em;">inyglowingstar</span></p>
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