Good Morning from here in Connecticut, Suchitra. You have done it again. Such a lovely, melodic poem. Your first stanza sets the tone and we are immediately engaged, and delighted to go on this beautiful journey – love, through your eyes. I do have one suggestion, as it was the only moment in the poem I stumbled a bit –
No bitter berry to
crush your taste of this
sky line of joy this
true wine from above
I think the stanza would flow more rhythmically if you removed one of the “this.” Example: “No bitter berry to/ crush your taste/sky line of joy this/…” Or, “No bitter berry to/crush your taste of this/sky line of joy/ true wine…”
Your poem is truly delightful – filled with a gentle – tempting view of love – with the wonderful advice:
“scatter the worry to those stars
shimmering late with jeweled tears”
I will definitely be featuring your poem for our February love theme. Probably next week. Thank you Suchitra. I hope life is treating you well and that you’re busy pursuing all of your many creative inclinations.
Your friend in poetry, Susan
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