Poetry Talk

You have certainly done a very fine job of sustaining the “S” sound throughout your poem.  Sometimes, when we concentrate on one element of a poem, we neglect other, equally ( or more important ) elements such as, imagery and clarity of meaning.  I particularly like the “Strains of sun that stain the summer.”  You have some fine skills.  I would suggest you try your hand at writing poem(s) that delve into the world of meaning, imagery and rhythmic considerations.  I think you would do very well.  Thank you so much for sharing your poem with me, Susan