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July 3, 2021 at 3:25 pm
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Keymaster
Thank you very much for sharing this very rhythmic poem. I very much liked “life disguised as ocean, or / ocean disguised as life.” You might want to think about your line break and see if there is a way to make your ending even more dramatic and meaningful. All best, Susan

