life, ocean

[wavering_star_]

ocean, sometimes stable,

another time unstable,

depending on moon, sometime strong,

sometimes fragile,

on the hustle to balance,

lost the track of wind,

flew away,

waves set it back,

tied up,

sailed with new aim, infinite thoughts,

with a beauty like pressure of air,

life disguised as ocean, or

ocean disguised as life.

[Susan Katz]

Thank you very much for sharing this very rhythmic poem.  I very much liked “life disguised as ocean, or / ocean disguised as life.”  You might want to think about your line break and see if there is a way to make your ending even more dramatic and meaningful.  All best, Susan

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