Poetry Talk

Good Morning from here in Connecticut, Suchitra.  You have done it again.  Such a lovely, melodic poem.  Your first stanza sets the tone and we are immediately engaged, and delighted to go on this beautiful journey – love, through your eyes.  I do have one suggestion, as it was the only moment in the poem I stumbled a bit –

No bitter berry to

crush your taste of this

sky line of joy this

true wine from above

I think the stanza would flow more rhythmically if you removed one of the “this.”  Example:  “No bitter berry to/ crush your taste/sky line of joy this/…”  Or, “No bitter berry to/crush your taste of this/sky line of joy/ true wine…”

Your poem is truly delightful – filled with a gentle – tempting view of love – with the wonderful advice:

“scatter the worry to those stars

shimmering late with jeweled tears” 

I will definitely be featuring your poem for our February love theme.  Probably next week. Thank you Suchitra.  I hope life is treating you well and that you’re busy pursuing all of your many creative inclinations. 

Your friend in poetry, Susan