Poetry Talk

You’ve tightened and heightened the intensity and the intent of the poem.  I will definitely be featuring your poem in the very near future.  Writing poetry is like planting a garden – the poem needs constant attention and “weeding” until it finally reaches its full potential.  You made great strides and did some fine editing.  I appreciate your trust in me and am delighted that you have shared your work.  Your friend in poetry, Susan

A kind of insanity plagues me

It wrecks and remakes me

Similar to the earth in the drought of time, hoarding the sea

Like the parched, dried-up river awaiting thee

Clear as nature’s unbiased  pain, weaved without heed  (in this context – “weaved”  should be “woven”)

Relief in the season’s breath ploughed bitter-sweet

I anticipate a storm birthing a seed

For there on the transient horizon

Is a phantom on the ocean’s breeze_ (I very much like this!)