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September 23, 2023 at 1:56 pm
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Keymaster
Thank you so very much for sharing your poetry with me. Your poem has a strong presence and some powerful lines (
As the sea bashes it’s head
Against the shore before a hurricane
There is strong imagery here and in some of your other lines as well. If I were to offer an editing suggestion, it would be to go back through the poem, removing all words that are not necessary to the power, purpose, and flow of the poem.
Your friend in poetry, Susan

