Poet Lady Katz: new forum reply to A World Full Of Imagination

New reply from Susan Katz

<p>Thank you so much for sharing this very thought-provoking poem with me.  You have some very fine lines in you poem and they give the poem a power and intensity,  "For now my ambition is my destination…" and "Where one can live in the world one drew…"  I would suggest you check your English grammar and also, as I say to everyone who submits poems, don't let the rhyme rule your poem!  Poetry is about a message but, a message that comes to us through imagery (metaphor and simile) and line break, and alliteration, and many other poetic techniques.  Your powerful message would come across so much stronger were we to hear it in a truly poetic voice.  I will, with pleasure, add your poem to the many I am considering for Featured Poem of the Month for July.  Thank you again for sharing this impassioned poem with me, Susan</p>


Original Post by Zaina I K

A World Full Of Imagination

<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="a658867d87af85ebca85badc3a61ec2a"><em>I dream to fly high ,</em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="2573aed0763b53d42f248fabf8d2da63"><em>Within and far away in the sky ,<br /></em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="661fddf2dbb3d18c9ea30663859c4442"><em>Far away from the web of lies ,</em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="bd5947e2e827e6aaca1c5e9f775ef94f"><em>In the beautiful land where one never cries ,<br /></em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="70e3a44d2cdc1aff13071fce8c6e3f14"><em>My imagination soars so mighty ,</em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="1466e8f06a8d7730c9981b95bb6db914"><em>That sometimes I think to dream is my duty ,<br /></em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="ae7245923c0dd0140e2b98158c09839d"><em>That's what i think is natures beauty ,</em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="c36c50c85f45f98d01e83cd5c4f23a2c"><em>I wish to run  ,</em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="3ecf07456a907bdfdf0b6cc02e616249"><em>Far away where there is always fun ,<br /></em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="c4502e675955ed0c5adf6e1ad039ca3a"><em>Where no one is ever threaten ,</em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="d11df94a563127945599bccffee7352f"><em>Or Bullied or beaten ,<br /></em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="0ec69a2df58fdf8256e81f2b2378d515"><em>Where one is never frighten ,</em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="4b297d47dbb8f51e07aec91a85f303b4"><em>I want my fantasy to be true ,</em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="f7f0c0b189cd5bce8a2fd14485488d80"><em>Where one can live in the world one drew ,<br /></em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="cd742df3f2eedd7996b5be678b4e4ca0"><em>So splendid so new ,</em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="717b39aff38b9f9064eb9c2d65bdaacc"><em>I crave for the freedom to write ,</em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="0b9d2fa027df03a842ddcc8614fbf532"><em>Where words are mightier than a mere fight ,<br /></em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="b3bcef69390f04badc0823fa9d8677fc"><em>Where everywhere is just light ,</em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="512883184e17499811635086a5284ee4"><em>Where everything can be cured ,<br /></em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="d7254a8584a76d5796586017bb9bf066"><em>And one is always assured ,</em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="f80397c17dcc256a48c5ea7b2834e86c"><em>For now its just a fragment of my imagination ,</em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="f15871d3970d750fae4c15ec6cccf904"><em>For now my ambition is my destination ,<br /></em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="6ba3080a2a19c9fff4f5849756d2fecb"><em>Where All this is just a silly temptation ,</em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="7d1059bdbd8f431800508d61a8bc9f1f"><em>As this world is full of competition ,<br /></em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="5605260d4ab76ee5b897837cda6fd222"><em>So just let this be a vacation ,</em></p>
<p style="text-align: center;" data-p-id="c24a22ece811d2fea9f220f34313d833"><em>From the world full of  aspiration .</em></p>