Poet Lady Katz: new forum reply to Dances of Past

New reply from Susan Katz

<p>Thank you so much for sending your poem my way.  There is such a nice cadence to your poem.  It moves with an almost breathless quality and you also have some fine lines and a great message.  I very much like the idea of traveling "the unknown me."  You might want to check on your English grammar, as there are some moments when it just doesn't translate very well.  Example – the line "the Dances of past" should have a "the" before past.  Also, one would not say, "it blooms my heart" but rather, "my heart blooms."  Very good job!  I am happy to add your poem to the many submitted for consideration for Featured Poem of the Month for July.  Thank you for sharing with me, Susan</p>


Original Post by veronica12024

Dances of Past

<p style="text-align: left;">The Sun stood gleaming,</p>
<p>The naked soul of mine beaming,</p>
<p>To gulp down the sparkling rays</p>
<p>From, the Dances of Past.</p>
<p> </p>
<p>I bend, I swirl</p>
<p>I levitate, I transform</p>
<p>To reveal the deific</p>
<p>To travel the unknown me.</p>
<p> </p>
<p>It blooms my heart, </p>
<p>Fills my lungs, </p>
<p>Expelling the Kali, </p>
<p>Embracing tranquility. </p>
<p> </p>