Poet Lady Katz: new forum reply to Darkness

New reply from Susan Katz

<p>Thank you so much for submitting your poem for consideration for Featured Poem of the Month for December.  I very much like the way the mood builds in your poem and how you create a sense of "darkness" that takes us on a dramatic journey.  I also think you did a great job with your ending stanza – the "slant" rhyme at the end, works really well.  Good job.</p>
<p>Your friend in poetry,</p>


Original Post by m_uzair_ans


<p>I lit a candle in the unending void,</p>
<p>It's glow searing the cold darkness;</p>
<p>Eyes wide, lips curled into a smile,</p>
<p>After long had I been this overjoyed.</p>
<p> </p>
<p>Came a squall of wind and sand,</p>
<p>And the flame began to falter;</p>
<p>Worry creeping upon my face,</p>
<p>I shielded the blaze with my hand.</p>
<p> </p>
<p>Rumbled and roared the mighty gust,</p>
<p>I tried my best to shelter the light;</p>
<p>But destiny sought something loathsome,</p>
<p>As the flame died of fate unjust.</p>
<p> </p>
<p>Fear of the imminent growing larger,</p>
<p>I foolishly hoped for the impossible;</p>
<p>The darkness did return inevitably,</p>
<p>Only this time it appeared darker.</p>
<p>(Ig: @m_uzair_ans)</p>