Poet Lady Katz: new forum reply to Dream love

New reply from Susan Katz

<p>Good Morning from here in Connecticut, Suchitra.  You have done it again.  Such a lovely, melodic poem.  Your first stanza sets the tone and we are immediately engaged, and delighted to go on this beautiful journey – love, through your eyes.  I do have one suggestion, as it was the only moment in the poem I stumbled a bit -</p>
<p>No bitter berry to</p>
<p>crush your taste of this</p>
<p>sky line of joy this</p>
<p>true wine from above</p>
<p>I think the stanza would flow more rhythmically if you removed one of the "this."  Example:  "No bitter berry to/ crush your taste/sky line of joy this/…"  Or, "No bitter berry to/crush your taste of this/sky line of joy/ true wine…"</p>
<p>Your poem is truly delightful – filled with a gentle – tempting view of love – with the wonderful advice:</p>
<p>"scatter the worry to those stars</p>
<p>shimmering late with jeweled tears"  </p>
<p>I will definitely be featuring your poem for our February love theme.  Probably next week. Thank you Suchitra.  I hope life is treating you well and that you're busy pursuing all of your many creative inclinations. </p>
<p>Your friend in poetry, Susan</p>

https://poetladykatz.com/poetry-talk/dream-love

Original Post by suchitralata

Dream love

<p>The first blush of love</p>
<p>rosy shy doe eyed</p>
<p>trembling drop</p>
<p>at the edge of tender leaves</p>
<p>rainbow flighted</p>
<p>sun delighted</p>
<p> </p>
<p>Deeper on to whispered</p>
<p>rush of unheard songs</p>
<p>tremolo of quiet delight</p>
<p>sweet coffee mornings</p>
<p>Sad happy swings</p>
<p> </p>
<p>No bitter berry to</p>
<p>crush your taste of this</p>
<p>sky line of joy this</p>
<p>true wine from above</p>
<p>scatter the worry to those stars</p>
<p>shimmering late with jeweled tears</p>
<p> </p>
<p>Close your eyes</p>
<p>dream love.</p>
<p> </p>
<p>12 Feb, 2022</p>