New reply from Susan Katz
<p>Thank you for sharing your very dramatic and heart-felt poem with me. I can feel the need and the pain and longing that you describe in your poem. I can feel "you" in your poem and that is, truly, the beginning of good poetry. I do believe you need to check your English tenses on many of your words and also, meanings of many words, as well as, I could wish you had depended less on rhyme and more on images (metaphors and similes.) The poem's message is powerful and I am happy to add it the many poems I've received and am considering for Featured Poem of the Month for July. – Susan</p>
https://poetladykatz.com/poetry-talk/my-broken-heart-about-you-by-karthi
Original Post by Karthika
My Broken heart about YOU
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<p>Baby you're my weakness,</p>
<p>But I know that you're careless</p>
<p>Every nights you appear on my dreams, </p>
<p>I just always thinking of our scenes. </p>
<p>I dunno what's the end for this story,</p>
<p>But my mind still thinking that you care me.</p>
<p>Baby..i need me,the old me,that care me</p>
<p>Oh my baby,</p>
<p>leave me or stand with me, </p>
<p>kill me or live with me,</p>
<p>burn me or grow with me.</p>
<p>Tell me what you feel or kill me by your hate. </p>
<p>Dunno what to say, but don't put plasters to your feelings.</p>
<p>Don't wear silence,just show me the truth,</p>
<p style="text-align: left;">Say Onto my face, or go away that's our end.</p>
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<p>- karthika</p>
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