New reply from Susan Katz
<p>Thank you very much for sharing your work with me. I very much like your theme – the uncertainty of the paths we will take, where our future may lead us, who we are and who we will become. What I need here, to make this poetry and not prose, is more attention to poetic techniques. For example:</p>
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<p>An astonishing decision could open up a new beginning, "Like lightning striking / illuminating new beginnings"</p>
<p>Also could create an unexpected moment in singing, "creating the song my heart's been singing."</p>
<p>We need, throughout the piece, the elements that will transform your "story" into poetry; metaphor, simile, alliteration, onomatopoeia, rhythm, rhyme…</p>
<p>Please feel free to share again, after you've had a chance to work on it.</p>
<p>Your friend in poetry, Susan</p>
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https://poetladykatz.com/poetry-talk/my-life-changing-decision
Original Post by Tiny glowing star
My life changing decision.
<p>MY LIFE CHANGING DECISION!</p>
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<p>I am a human being in youth,</p>
<p>While various decisions is laid out in sequence,</p>
<p>To interpret in thoughts,</p>
<p>Fighting with predicaments all along to make an ultimate decision!</p>
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<p>I am not like Sherlock Holmes,</p>
<p>Making decision in an instant at home,</p>
<p>As I am staring over my dreams like goals,</p>
<p>With some soothing coffee in hand!</p>
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<p>Different decisions with favourable paths,</p>
<p>While some are successful and unsuccessful in earth,</p>
<p>But always an option should waltz with the heart,</p>
<p>Indicating our intriguing interest in it!</p>
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<p>An astonishing decision could open up a new beginning,</p>
<p>Also could create an unexpected moment in singing,</p>
<p>While there maybe some perils in paths,</p>
<p>I don't mind breaking that barrier apart altogether!</p>
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<p>A story about my life,</p>
<p>Where I am the lead heroine in this stage,</p>
<p>If a decision could change this unpredictable stage,</p>
<p>It's the decision that makes me to endure and smile at the same time!</p>
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<p>- tiny glowing star.</p>
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