Poet Lady Katz: new forum reply to My Magic Wand

New reply from Susan Katz

<p>Good job!  You have some very meaningful and powerful moments in your poem and you take us on the journey of the poet – from pain to purpose – to poetry.  I'm happy to consider your poem for Featured Poem of the Month for December.</p>
<p>I think you have done a fine job with this poem and would only suggest that you consider moments in the poem, that would benefit from imagery.  Example: "<strong>And makes tears flow from our eyes…"  Question – do you need "and makes" could not the line start with – "tears flow from our eyes (and here is where a great image could go) "tears flow from our eyes like…"</strong></p>
<p>Also, I wonder, as poems are described as "the fewest words in the best possible order" – if you might not want to consider moving through your poem by taking out the repetition of "I found…"  "But I found a wand/ a pen/ spells/ a page/ a remedy/ for our souls…"</p>
<p>Well done – thank you so much for sharing your work with me, Susan</p>


Original Post by A.Zaman

My Magic Wand

<div class="wps_wp_editor_quote" style="text-align: justify;"><strong>We all feel magic,<br />It spins through our souls.<br />And rushes into our minds,<br />It lifts the corner of our lips,<br />Into a smile.<br />It rushes in waves,<br />And makes tears flow from our eyes,<br />It boils our blood,<br />And makes our brows frown.<br />It hounds us day and night.<br />Sometimes we float,<br />Sometimes we sink,<br />Yes, i felt magic too, <br />I felt it strong. <br />But i found a wand, <br />I found a pen. <br />I found spells. <br />I found a page. <br />I found a remedy, <br />For our souls. <br />To share our happiness, <br />To burrow our pain. <br />We Will find a wand. <br />We will find a spell. <br />We will find a pen. <br />We will find a page. <br />We will write. <br />And when our sorrows, <br />Sear through, <br />Pens that we hold, <br />We will bleed ink, <br />Onto paper, <br />We will bleed away our souls. <br />Our ink will bleed in torrents<br />And poetry,<br />Poetry will be bandages to these Wounds. </strong></div>