Poet Lady Katz: new forum reply to She is mine

New reply from Susan Katz

<p>Very loving and very nicely done.  You have a light and appealing rhythm to your poem and certainly, a great deal of emotion.  May I suggest a couple of things that are grammatically incorrect – " show" should be "shows" – and "throw" should be "throws" – and you might want to add the word "and" between Spring – Fall.  I think this is a very well thought-out and well-written poem – beautiful imagery.  I do very much like "the dawn show…" and your ending.  Your friend in poetry, Susan</p>


Original Post by Akshay2710

She is mine

<p style="padding-left: 40px; text-align: left;">She is the depth of my ocean..</p>
<p>         She is the extreme of my Sky..</p>
<p>         She is the gloom in my light…</p>
<p>         She is the bloom in my smile..</p>
<p>          She is the blossom in my garden…</p>
<p>          She is the beauty in my face..</p>
<p>           She is my dialect….</p>
<p>            She gave me the sunrise…</p>
<p>             She show me the Spring fall..</p>
<p>           She throw me the dawn show..</p>
<p>             She gave me the Smile..</p>
<p>              She gave me the Love…</p>
<p>             She gave me the Life….</p>
<p>              But, She took my heart…</p>
<p style="padding-left: 40px;">              She is mine…..</p>