New reply from Susan Katz
<p>Very loving and very nicely done. You have a light and appealing rhythm to your poem and certainly, a great deal of emotion. May I suggest a couple of things that are grammatically incorrect – " show" should be "shows" – and "throw" should be "throws" – and you might want to add the word "and" between Spring – Fall. I think this is a very well thought-out and well-written poem – beautiful imagery. I do very much like "the dawn show…" and your ending. Your friend in poetry, Susan</p>
https://poetladykatz.com/poetry-talk/she-is-mine-2
Original Post by Akshay2710
She is mine
<p style="padding-left: 40px; text-align: left;">She is the depth of my ocean..</p>
<p> She is the extreme of my Sky..</p>
<p> She is the gloom in my light…</p>
<p> She is the bloom in my smile..</p>
<p> She is the blossom in my garden…</p>
<p> She is the beauty in my face..</p>
<p> She is my dialect….</p>
<p> She gave me the sunrise…</p>
<p> She show me the Spring fall..</p>
<p> She throw me the dawn show..</p>
<p> She gave me the Smile..</p>
<p> She gave me the Love…</p>
<p> She gave me the Life….</p>
<p> But, She took my heart…</p>
<p style="padding-left: 40px;"> She is mine…..</p>