Poet Lady Katz: new forum reply to Strength Of Hope (Edited)

New reply from Susan Katz

<p>Nice use of imagery and not dependent on rhyme.  I would suggest that you might want to consider that in poetry, less is more.  In other words, if you don't absolutely need a word, don't use it.  In this lovely little poem, removing the words (a bit) in the first line, the word (and) in the second line, the word (indeed and still – changing meet to meeting at the horizon) in the fourth line,  the word (the and the) in the fifth line, would tighten the poem, giving it even greater impact.  I think you really understand the essence of poetry and simply, like all poets, have to go back to your poem and do the job of editing.  I will be considering your poem for featuring on a future poetladykatz Instagram post.  Thank you so much for sharing your work with me, Susan</p>


Original Post by SriSougandhika

Strength Of Hope (Edited)

<p>I will stay here for eternity,</p>
<p>Don't you worry a bit,</p>
<p>I'll be the mighty sky and you be the seamless sea, </p>
<p>We are separated indeed, still meet at the horizon.</p>
<p>Let the love become the indestructible bond,</p>
<p>Unbroken forever and ever.</p>